Raat ki pakad dheeli pad rahi hai aur chaaand bhi ek taraf chala ja raha hai.aakhir wo jaana kahan chahta hai? shayad wo kahin chhip jana chahata hai.subah ke aanchal me chhipne ko betaab ye chaand bekhabar hai suraj ke us tez se jo uska namo nishaan tak mita jaega.shayad.....andhera hi chaand ka ujala hai.sab ujale se pyar karte hain chalo andhere se kisi ko to kinaara mila.
Raat hoti hai to har taraf hota hai bas andhera, khamoshi ,udasi aur tanhai sab so rahe hote hain bas akela chand hi jag raha hota hai.sundarta aur prem ka paryaay bana ye chaand sari raaat idhar udhar bhatakta hai,talaash hai use apne humsafar ki lekin wo abhiii tak tanha hai,akela hai.humsafar ko khojte khojte subah hoti hai aur chand ko lagta hai ki uska humsafar use milne wala hai.ab chaand bahut khush hai lekin ye kya?? chaand ki chamak pheeki kyun pad rahi hai? kya suraj pe uska itna vishwas karna galat hai? aur ye kya suraj ne to pure chaand ko hi nigal liya hai.jispe itna bharosa kiya usi ne itna bada dhoka diya.
Lekin shayad chaand hi galat tha.usne galat shaks pe vishwas kiya.usne us cheez ko paane ki koshish ki jo kabhi uski ho hi nahi sakti thi aur hoti bhi kaise puri raat pagalon ki tarah uska saath dene wale andhere ko jo usne chhod diya tha aur dekho ab khud ko hi kho baitha hai ye chaand.chaand pe agar sabse jyada haq kisi ka hai to wo hai andhere ka lekin.. sabhi darte hain is andhere se ki kahin wo unhe nigal na le.andhere ka dard to koi samjh hi na paya.bechare ne ghut ghut kar dum tod diya aur apne sangharsh me haar gaya.kya andhere ka kasoor sirf itna hai ki wo khamosh hai,dard lapete hue hai,bilkul tanha hai???
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Well well...i think comments toh nahin lekin bahut saare compliments jaroor milne chahiye tumhe ise likhne ke liye....u ve done a gr8 job...bravo.......nd haan yeh aacha toh hai hi...but mujhe jyada aacha tab laga tha jab tumne ise padh ke sunaya tha.....usme jyada dard nd jyada feelings jhalak rahi thi...but never mind sab meri taranh lucky nahin ho sakte jinhe tum sunao...toh baki sab padh ke hi khush ho jayen.....keep up gud works like dis!!!
first of all....the same question..ye write up khan se churayi hai???...just kidding....
aur haan... kabhi fursat mileee... to hame bhi kabhi kabhal apni juban se sunaya karo..
overall the write up was better but this lines "andhere ko jo usne chhod diya tha aur dekho ab khud ko hi kho baitha hai ye chaand" is really wonderful.
Waise to tumhe kafi kareeb se jante hain
Magar is kadar dard kahan se umad raha hai ye samajh nahi paa rahe hain
Kabhi hamein bhi is raaz ka humraaz banaoge yahi umeed karte hain.
Kehte hai mohabbat insaan ko shayar bana deti hai
Salaam hai us nazneen ko jisne tumhe yun shayar bana diya.
Salaam hai us andhere ko jisne chand se bina kuch bhi maange sirf aur sirf pyaar diya.
wah pravin bhai!!
mann gaye aapko!!
prakriti me aadi kaal se maujud aandhere ke daard aur chaand ke andhe
prem ko jis tarah se ukera hai wo vakai me prasansaniya hai!!
andhere me aam log uski bhayavata ko khojte rah jate hai,par aapne uske dard ko samajh kar sidh kar diya ki aap aam logo se hat kar hai.
bhavishya me isi tarah ke umda blog ki pratiksha me.............
bas ab likhte rahiye
jo tumne likha hai woh ek word mein bolun to "mesmerising" ,kya likha hai dost...............laajawaab likha hai.............isi tarah likhte raho.........is chiraag ko boojhne mat dena............bas apne kalam se aur apni umadti hui soch se bas panno ko rang dena ...........aur har baar aisa rangna ki koi apni nazar hi naa hata paaye......tumhare agle kadam ki pratiksha mein...........
praveen bhai...ye chand ki sabse badi bhool thi ki usne andhere ko andekha kar diya aur chamakte hue surya ke liye baat johta raha...
aur use usi bhool ki keemat chukaani padi apna sundar sa astitwa khokar...
aur udhar andhera to apni khaamoshi ki bemishaal misaal pesh kiya hai...aapki lekhni mein wo jaadoo hai jo samay ke saath prakriti ke panno par amit lakiren ukerti chali jaayegi..........
bahut mushkil hai mere liye kuch bhi likhna kyunki mujh jaisa seedhi saadi bhasha janne waala agar in sab cheezon par comment karne laga to in cheezon ki tauheen hi hogi. par ek baat mujhe nahi samajh mein aayi jo maine praveen se us din bhi poocha tha jab isne mujhe pehli baar ye padhaya tha, "Itna Dard Kyun?" par jo bhi kaaran ho is dard ka tune likha mast hai yaar. ek baat aur tum kehte ho tumhe koi samajh nahi sakta, main kehta hun ki ek mauka deke dekho tumhari ruh ke under na ghus jaun to kehna........
but whatever it is, u r mast nd the whole thing is also mast.
wah kya bat hai aap ne to kamal kar di janab. waise sero sayari to azamgarhio ke rag rag me hai.jo bhi ho achha hai likhate raho.chalo jyada tarif karane ki jarurat nahi hai nahi to tu likhana chhod dega ,tumane chand pe likha sahi hai kyoki isase rat jhalakati hai aur sone ka samay,
"jo maja hai sone me ,
nahi duniya ke kisi kone me."
-MADAN
Wah maza aa gaya re bhai.....macha diya tune toh......waise hume kab itna lucky bana rahe ho ki aap hume yeh khud sunayen??.....ya phir aap kuch hi logon ko itna lucky banate hain??
sayad tumhe bura lage par suru ka bahut boring hai. log kewal es liye pade kyo ki wo tumne likha hai .starting could be more better .suruat me tumkhudh hi bhatake hue ho.but last is amazing ,perfect.
aur han gyanendra ka comment bilkulhi sahi hai "ishqe logo ko sayarbana deta hai".tum lakh kaho bat sach hai
overall starting is slightlymore than good.
GOOD LUCK
achchha likha tha yar, padhte padhte "mahakavi maagh ka prabhaat varnan" yaad aa gaya, shuruat to ultimate thi, bas beech mein urdu thodi kam kar sakte the, shuddh hindi aise mein zyada bhaati hai.
uar haan, blog ka outlook bhi mast hai, ekdum blog ke laayak
kuchh aur post kijiye praveenji :))
bhai bade dino se chah rahe the yahan ek aacha sa blog likhne ko...par soch rahe the ki pehle aap ghar chale jayen fir likhenge....ab aap kal ghar gaye isme hamari kya galti hai bhaiya ji??.......well apka likha hua toh theek hi hai...par aapse aacha toh apke first comment karne wali ka likha hai...tanik hamari bhi vartalaap kara dijiye unse......chaliye aap toh karane se rahe baat cheet...hum khud hi baat kar lete hain..
hello himanshi ji.....kya haal hai apka.....jo bhi kahen aap likhti bahut aacha hain.....hamare bhaiya ji ki jhoothi tareef bhi bahut aachi karti hain...tanik hamari bhi tareef kar dijiye...hamare paas bhi tareef karane layak bahut kuch hai........
hello mr. anonymous......
m gud....hw r u??...waise agar apko mujhse baat hi karni hai toh inhe kyun keh rahe hain..main khud karti hun na aapse baat.....
oh yeh kya??...apne toh apna naam hi nahin likha...oops.....aise nahin kehna chahiye na mujhe....shayad naam likhne mein apki fatt rahi ho....
oh....jyada bada word use kar diya na??
sorry..shayd tujhe aacha na laga ho.....
m so sorry (abe ja ke aaine mein shakal dekh..bada aaya mujhse sorry bulwane wala)...
himmat hai toh naam likh....
dar mat...main sirf teri thodi si utarungi (arre izzat ki baat kar rahi hun.....tu kya samjha??)
u r just an ASSHOLE
abe anonymous ki aulaad ..
pichhe se kya bak raha hai be..
gali sun li na ab kat le ...
abe bolna hi tha to naam likhte ..maa baap ne naam rakha hai na ??? (maa baap to pata hain na ???)...
okie nahi pata to pata kar aur pata chalte hi fauran naam rakhva liyo unse aur phir bataiyon ki tu kaun hai..???
inka toh pata nahin tha..but bhaiya ji aap se yeh umeed nahin thi
chaliye koi baat nahin
hum toh abhi bhi himanshi ji ke diwane hain yeh hume apnayen na apnayen
hum toh inke ho gaye hain
sache pyaar karne wale ko toh duniya gali deti hi hai
par duniya walon ki hum sunte nahin
and himanshi ji
please agar ho sake toh aage se thodi tameez se baat kijiyega
apko like karke koi galti toh nahin ki humne
jo ap aise bol rahi hain
ap aapko bhagwaan ne aisa toh isiliye banaya hai na ki aapko koi like kare
waise bhi ladkiyon ke munh pe gali aachi nahin lagti
aur hume hamare parents ne naam dia hai par hum aapko batana zaroori nahin samjhte
hi praveen..
very nicely written and was descripted..i never thought of the feeling of the darkness..but u have enlightened it.......but u know the worst thing is that everybody desire for the one whom they cannot achieve and never realise the importance of the person who is around them...but i guess this is only life...
well again very well said...
all the best
Regards
Nupur
kahaaan chale gaye prabhu aap....blog ki duniya se !!
mesmerised is probabaly d word..!!
still wondering if some one can play wid words so beautifully giving entirely new dimensions to d perspectives....too good...!!..
haan bhaiyaa .........main kyaa kahoon sab andhera kaha chuka.....aur mere andhere ..........kalpana par kaaboo rakh health ke liye theek nahin hai!!!!!!! vaise achchhi gaharayee hai pada kar khush huaa?? thanks for thodi gaharai mujhe dene ke liye!!!!!!
pravin
i think u r a real poet thinker
mai samajh nahi apti hu ki itna saare hunar se kudrat ne tumko kaise nawaza hai?
khuda ka shukar hai ki aap mere dost hai
bahut hi achchi baat likhi hai
ek naya nazariya diya hai aapne aaj
khuda hafiz
itni kam umar me Itni zindagi ji liye ho....aage jina bahut aasaan rahega...very appreciable..
Allthough tillnow I have not shared my any of the poem to any one but I share one of those to u.
''Door ho to kyaa huaa,.
ik phoonk to maro. apne labon se, mei sochati aankhon pe.
Guzare hue pal udate hue aayein dekh loon tumhari saanson pe....{wrote few months back}www.astrosushil.blogspot.com
itni kam umar me Itni zindagi ji liye ho....aage jina bahut aasaan rahega...very appreciable..
Allthough tillnow I have not shared my any of the poem to any one but I share one of those to u.
''Door ho to kyaa huaa,.
ik phoonk to maro. apne labon se, mei sochati aankhon pe.
Guzare hue pal udate hue aayein dekh loon tumhari saanson pe....{wrote few months back}www.astrosushil.blogspot.com
mera jeevan kora kaagaZ kora hi reh gaya.....
mind-blowing...fabulous...out-standing....towering talent man...sahi mein machata hai...
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